Peter was alone at home and suddenly the phone rang….
Peter Smith was a
young boy of 14, he lived in the suburbs of sunny Goa. He was a tall, rather
skinny, freckled lad with wispy brown hair, big brown eyes and a round face. He
was quite a normal kid; nothing remarkably different about him. Average marks,
average life etc. That was until that day, where his life would change forever.
That day Peter’s parents had left him alone at
home to do some adult task Peter didn’t ask about. It was a gray Sunday
afternoon, Peter’s parents were to return the following day. He had been
feeling a little off that day, he felt something in the air, sort of like an
evil omen. But he just shrugged it off thinking it was just the gloomy weather.
At about 7pm Peter
decided to plug in a movie, he was quite focused in the movie and wasn’t really
aware of his surroundings. That was until the phone rang. The sound of the
telephone filled the whole house and became louder and louder. Peter was
surprised by the call, he wasn’t really expecting anyone. He didn’t have many
friends who would want to call him.
Reluctantly, Peter
paused the movie and went to pick up the phone. Then suddenly he got a chill;
like somebody had poured ice water down his shirt. He chose to ignore it yet
again and finally picked up the call. When he answered the call he heard
nothing, absolute silence. “Hello?” Peter said, and then suddenly he heard a
high – pitched, shrill giggle from the other end and then the other person hung
up. Thinking it was a prank call of some sort, but somewhere inside he knew it
was much more than that.
Peter checked the call
log; and he was completely taken aback. It was the landline in his parent’s
room!
Now Peter was scared,
very scared. He wasn’t one to believe in ghosts, but now his mind started
thinking otherwise. He went up the stairs to his parent’s room, with each step
the stair would creak. It seemed that time was moving in slow – motion.
He finally reached his parent’s room. He softly opened the door, Peter was sweating buckets now. Inside he saw pitch – black darkness. He put his hand on the light switch and felt another bony, scaly hand there...
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